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QUESTION I saw a sentence on a resume and was wondering what was wrong with it (I know something was wrong)... The sentence was... "Wrote thesis on economic priniciples of France and traveled there to assess its validity." It was supposed to mean that he was assessing the validity of the paper, but instead reads as if he is assessing the validity of the country of France... Is this a dangling participle? I'm not sure and would appreciate you getting back to me to confirm what this kind of mistake is called... Thanks... SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE New York, New York Tue, Aug 10, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE There's no dangling participle there. The possessive pronoun "its" doesn't know whether to refer to "thesis" or "France," which is most unfortunate. It's also trying to refer to "principles," which is true folly because "principles" is plural. The writer would have been better off with a bit of repetition and a lot less ambiguity: "traveled there to assess the validity of that thesis." (Yeah, right!) There is something horribly vague about "economic principles of France"something that could consume whole libraries, I'm sure. I don't think I'm willing to read this thesis, although I am willing to travel to France to test it out.
QUESTION What is the best wording? I realize this is a difference in tenses. I just wonder which is more appropriate for a mission statement.
- The Intranet Advisory Board shall determine Intranet standards, manage the prioritization of maintenance and enhancement requests, act as a centralized associate Intranet contact unit, and ensure the realization of expected benefits and efficiencies.
Or,- The Intranet Advisory Board determines Intranet standards, manages the prioritization of maintenance and enhancement requests, acts as a centralized associate Intranet contact unit, and ensures the realization of expected benefits and efficiencies.
Thanks in advance for your help.
SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Columbia, South Carolina Tue, Aug 10, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE I can't tell from this. It will depend on the context of the rest of your mission statement: are you describing what you do (use the simple present) or what you intend to do (use the "shall"). I imagine the simple present will suffice. I hope you can come up with simpler wording for "a centralized associate Intranet contact unit." It would take a brave reader to walk through that bit of phrasing at night. And maybe just "prioritize" (or "establish priorities among"?) instead of "manage the prioritization"?
QUESTION Here is my sentence: "The Global Plan has been developed so that it has a clear and functional relationship with the regional air navigation plans."I don't like this sentence. In particular, I don't like the "so that it has" part. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. I am wondering if there is a single word that could replace these words? Thanks.SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Montreal, Quebec, Canada Tue, Aug 10, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE I think your instincts about "so that it has" are correct. What's wrong with The newly developed Global Plan has a clear and functional relationship with the regional air navigation plans.You might also try an infinitiveto demonstrate, to incorporate ??instead of "so that it has."
QUESTION I am a sports reporter working for the Fort Worth Star-Telegram and am writing an opinion column about athletes who refer to themselves in the third person. For example: "Deion Sanders is only going to play when God tells Deion Sanders it's time to play," said Dallas Cowboys cornerback Deion Sanders. Another example: "Tom Watson doesn't have to prove that Tom Watson still knows how to play golf," professional golfer Tom Watson said. This interesting tic in usage has become so widespread that I have found 18-year old NBA draft picks referring to themselves in the third person, and I will not be surprised when high school athletes pick up on the trend. My question then, is both technical and philosophical: When is it appropriate for a person to refer to himself or herself in the third person? Why do people of questionable worldwide importance believe they should refer to themselves in the third person? Finally, in the case of the Queen of England or other royal personages, are they required to refer to themselves in third person and why is this so? SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Fort Worth, Texas Tue, Aug 10, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE I think your question is more psychological than either technical or philosophical. In the tradition of royalty, the head of state often refers to himself or herself using the "royal we" or even in the third person because, in that tradition, the head of state represents more than himself or herself. That person stands for the state, embodies, in a sense that is more than symbolic, the state. Thus, Hamlet is Denmark. That tradition is definitely dying out, however, and Burchfield says that Queen Elizabeth herself seldom uses these royal language prerogatives. Why do athletes refer to themselves in the third-person, however? They probably do regard themselves as a kind of royalty, as something larger than lifewhether this attitude is their own ego speaking or something foisted upon them by the media and by fans, who knows? I suppose if you read about yourself in the newspaper far more than you reflect about yourself (your real self), you might well slip into the habit. It might also be a symptom of dissociation, a process in which an individual disconnects himself from the horrors of his daily life by "pretending" that it's happening to someone else (it is said to be common among the victims of sexual abuse, for instance, who use the multiple personality [ironically] as a kind of defense against insanity). Now it might be hard to see the daily life of a multi-zilllionaire like Deion Sanders as being filled with "horrors," but such a life could surely be regarded as something unreal, a kind of perpetual play, and a dissociation or bifurcation between the real me and the me that one reads about all the time in the sports pages might be quite convenient to the beleaguered "player."
Another possibility: athletes who use such rhetorical devices are committing what are called a hyperurbanismlike saying "between you and I" or "Whom is at the door?" They use such language because they think it sounds good. They get a reaction (and any reaction will do), so they keep using it. At least that's what we think.
QUESTION Which expression would be correct; company wide, company-wide or companywide? An example would be; As shown in a company wide report.SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Bellevue, Washington Thu, Aug 12, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE Based on analogy with nationwide, worldwide, statewide (because I can't find the actual word in a dictionary), I'd go with companywide. Authority: The New Fowler's Modern English Usage edited by R.W. Burchfield. Clarendon Press: Oxford, England. 1996. Used with the permission of Oxford University Press. (Under -wide)
QUESTION Can you explain the different usage of damping versus dampening? Thank you very much. SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Clearwater, Florida Thu, Aug 12, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE According to Burchfield, "to dampen" is an American variant of "to damp," although it ("to dampen") is catching on speedily in the UK. Frankly, I'd never heard of "damp" as a verb. Authority: The New Fowler's Modern English Usage edited by R.W. Burchfield. Clarendon Press: Oxford, England. 1996. Used with the permission of Oxford University Press.
QUESTION What is the correct way to use "all"? Should a person say "all" or "all of"? Thank you for publishing your on-line guide to grammar. I found it on the internet yesterday.
- He moved all the books.
- He moved all of the books.
- All of these files belong to her.
- All these files belong to her.
SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Unknown Thu, Aug 12, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE In most constructions, we dispense happily with the "of." However, when there is another pronoun (such as "those, those") following the "all," it's probably a good idea to include the "of." Authority: The New Fowler's Modern English Usage edited by R.W. Burchfield. Clarendon Press: Oxford, England. 1996. Used with the permission of Oxford University Press. (under all)
QUESTION Please help me settle a grammatical dispute with a friend regarding the following sentence. "The Andrews Family is not available."He says it should be "are" not available. I see "family" as a singular noun which requires the singular verb "is". The surname "Andrews" does not change the verb tense. Here's hoping I'm right because he's a big-wig copywriter with attitude!Looking forward to your response.....
SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE Kingston, Ontario, Canada Thu, Aug 12, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE Here's hoping your copywriting friend is putting you on. "Family" is a singular entity; it needs a singular verb, "is." The question is one of subject-verb agreement, not of tense (you'd also say "was," not "were," in the past). I don't know why you'd capitalize "family" in that sentence, though.
QUESTION Hello! I am a graduate student working as a tutor with students whose native language is not English. One of my students wrote the following sentence in an essay: "I've already known the ideal theory of music education."My initial reaction was to change "I've already known..." to "I already know...". However, when I tried to explain this to the student, I was unable to explain why. The present perfect indicates a state that began in the past (her knowing the theory) and that continues into the present (she still knows this theory). Yet, it just doesn't sound right. Can you explain why? Thanks for your help!SOURCE OF QUESTION & DATE OF RESPONSE New York, New York Fri, Aug 13, 1999 GRAMMAR'S RESPONSE You don't want the present perfect in that sentence because that tense also allows for the possibility that the speaker no longer knows the theory (has known [right up to the present] but has also forgotten). The simple present means that the speaker knows the theory now, and that's exactly what he or she wants to say.
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